Research shows 80% of printing companies provide 3D printing services to their clients

Correct / A broad statement / A factual statement / A broad statement /
An announcement / An immeasurable claim

Note: There is nothing to argue here. We need to improve the ‘claim’ of the thesis statement by adding a point of view / an interpretation.
The subject of this paper is the negative influence of demonstrations on teenagers.

Correct / A factual statement / A broad statement /
An announcement / An immeasurable claim

Note: “nature” is too broad to be discussed. Sometimes, we need to improve the ‘claim’ but sometimes we need to improve the ‘context’ of the thesis statement. The improvement could be done by narrowing down the thesis or the context.
Writing an essay is challenging for university freshmen.

Correct / A factual statement / A broad statement /
An announcement / An immeasurable claim

Note: ‘challenging’ is hard to measure objectively.
Freedom of speech a fundamental human right.

Correct / A factual statement / A broad statement /
An announcement / An immeasurable claim

Note: even though we can formulate a counter argument against this thesis statement, it is known to be a general truth and hard to refute.
We are going to discuss the reasons behind World War I.

Correct / A factual statement / A broad statement /
An announcement / An immeasurable claim

Note: Importance is difficult to objectively measure. We need to improve the ‘claim’ of the thesis statement by using an adjective that could be objectively measured, such as ‘essential tools of communication’.
The quality of pre-school education is a significant predictor of primary school achievement in HK.

Correct / A factual statement / A broad statement /
An announcement / An immeasurable claim

Note: Importance is difficult to objectively measure. We need to improve the ‘claim’ of the thesis statement by using an adjective that could be objectively measured, such as ‘essential tools of communication’.
In HK, students need to obtain excellent results in DSE to study medical science.

Correct / A factual statement / A broad statement /
An announcement / An immeasurable claim

Note: Importance is difficult to objectively measure. We need to improve the ‘claim’ of the thesis statement by using an adjective that could be objectively measured, such as ‘essential tools of communication’.
School achievements should be one indicator of students’ all round ability.

Correct / A factual statement / A broad statement /
An announcement / An immeasurable claim

Note: ‘all round ability’ is considered to be too broad.
Science education is widely taught in HK.

Correct / A factual statement / A broad statement /
An announcement / An immeasurable claim

Note: ‘Science education’ is considered to be too broad for a thesis.
Gender inequality is a common problem in developed and developing countries.

Correct / A factual statement / A broad statement /
An announcement / An immeasurable claim

Note: Importance is difficult to objectively measure. We need to improve the ‘claim’ of the thesis statement by using an adjective that could be objectively measured, such as ‘essential tools of communication’.